aaaaa the 18+ scenes don't play any major part in the overall storyline, and as such, they aren't my highest priority right now. So I don't think I'll be adding any varying scenes with Ren until later down the line >.< Sorry!!
I have, however, written a few fics with sub/bottoming Ren on Tumblr if you're interested in checking them out!! ^^
I'm very sorry for making you wait so long, but just like everyone else: I have my own real-life priorities that I need to attend to first ^^; 14DWY is just a silly lil passion project for me, and I work on it whenever I feel like it. So please don't beg creators for updates ;v;
I'm sorry, but due to the app store guidelines and the 18+ nature of the game, there unfortunately won't be any mobile versions of "14 Days With You" for the foreseeable future.
help im new to this how do i play this game? i downloaded it already but i cant playy itt i even tried extracting it but i dont know what to do next!! TT pls help- i dont even know what application to click after i extracted it since i dont know what it looks like
go to the extracted folder and there will be 3 folders with game assets and 3 files: executable(the game), python file(game code) and sh file(also code). you need to chose the executable/application file like the one with the ren py(the vn engine) mascot girl. if you don't have the exe file maybe your antivirus thought it was sus and ate it, that happens sometimes... go check the sandbox/quarantine section maybe it's in there or try downloading and extracting the game again
whoa, this is SO GOOD. visuals are very pleasant, dialogue is really captivating, Ren is creepy in that perfect yandere way - love it!! can't wait to see how the full story's going to turn out UwU best of luck to you with the development, and thank you for such a wonderful experience!
I'm sorry, but due to the app store guidelines and the 18+ nature of the game, there unfortunately won't be any mobile versions of "14 Days With You" for the foreseeable future.
yeah i'm sad that they haven't posted on social media, the only thing i see is their tumblr and they responded to questions 2 weeks ago but i get scareddd
Wahhhh I'm the only person who's working on the game and managing all of the social media accounts, so it can get a bit overwhelming for me sometimes ^^;
sorry, i didn't mean to say that in a bad way ! Take your time ofc and i didn't intend to make it sound like you should constantly be posting, i hope you're doing well and taking care of yourself !
Is it just me or can y'all not find the game itself in the files ;-; like no matter how many times I skim through all of the files and file folders I can't find the actual game.
I really liked the whole plot around the MC, and the cutest thing is the face the character makes, which is really like someone with a double personality, I laughed a lot, including the part where he says he's going to push the girl up the stairs low loooooooooll.
aaaa please don't comment these kinds of things here... It actually demotivates me more >.< I have a life outside of working on 14DWY, and having people constantly spam/guilt trip me for updates makes it seem like I'm nothing more than a robot ;v;
I know you mean well, and I'm very sorry for making you wait so long, but I'll continue to work on 14dWY and release content whenever I want to ^^;
Ok my last time complaining about it not working but T_T I finally tried getting the game again on a entirely separate laptop because that other one wouldn’t work, and I extracted it and everything but just when I get to the end of day 1 I just go back to the main menu. (Tryna make this short cuz I don’t wanna bother anyone 🙏 ) the file was 2.0 but when I clicked it it was 1.0. I’m likely doing something wrong again 😤
it could just be me / the download link / my laptop or Ren just hates me. anyways ill stop complaining now and just be patient and wait for an update 😞 sorry guys!
I'm so sorry for the late response!! I don't usually check itch T_T
I'm not sure if you've already solved your problem, but just in case: make sure you've deleted any older versions of the game!! There should be a "Ren'Py" folder somewhere in your documents/applications folder; and inside it should be a "14 Days With You" folder as well. Just delete (or move) the entire folder and see if that works! If not, you might've downloaded the wrong file ^^;
I have the same thing happen to me, but it was just the name of the file. It usually still has the update even if it's called 1.0. Have you tried to open it and it only had Day 1? Because if not, I think you should try and see if it does have the update.
Nah bro, im in love with this game, I can't wait for the third day to come out. Keep going with this masterpiece!! 🗣🔥 (I don't talk english btw so im afraid that the things that i say might be not understandable for the people that talk english idk)
Ahhhh dios adoro el juego, pienso comprarlo ya cuando salga el dia 3, espero también saquen en español que igual somos una comunidad grande, solo digo jeje
I'm soooo looking forward to more updates! It's a very good game and Ren is a character that captivates me and makes me curious to know more about him and all his spicy scenes lololololll. I also want to know what happened to Violet and Elanor, I feel like something isn't right.
I wonder if there's some way to make Ren feel more confident about himself and not feel threatened by anyone who comes near the MC... it's the first game I've played with this theme, so that's something I want to try, if possible.
Thanks for the great game! Keep up the good work! <3
You can use JoiPlay for this. Download the program, the plugin for ren'py and simply add the same file as on this site.(I found this out almost by accident when I decided to try using the Doki-Doki game file)
I have played this game on my pc and loved it! It’s honestly an amazing game! But I wonder creator- do you think you can make it downloadable on mobile? Like android and iOS?
I'm sorry, but due to the app store guidelines and the 18+ nature of the game, there unfortunately won't be any mobile versions of "14 Days With You" for the foreseeable future.
I NEED THE NEXT DAY OR FULL GAME I FEEL LIKE IM DYINGGG i love this game so so much i have such an emotional connection to ren and i dont normally get attached to demo characters but im in love with this and the storyline is amazing too i am curious as to what is under his shirt that he is so desperate about us not seeing but im willing to wait to find that out but this game is amazing i adore ren so much hes so cute i just cantt
was looking through the yandere tag on ao3 and found a fic about ren-- this was so much better than i could've even imagined, and that's after the pretty characters, dope customizations, and your humor on this page! <3 i love all the little things (we zoomin' bois made me lol, attack on giant--) and geeeze the writing is so kick ass dude!! i'm an absolute fan and i caaaan't (but obvs will) wait to see what the other 12 days holds!! bad ends ftw but yeeyee that woohoo tho ;w; again, v well written hehehe. keep up the good work :')<3
HAAAAAAAAAAAaaaaaaaaaaaaaa I love the game, please translate it into Spanish, it doesn't matter if it's with Google translate, I need it!!! (/T//u//T)/
I have MANY thoughts on this, but they are all my personal opinion. I see a game with so much potential, it clearly has a lot of love in it.
I think the 1st person angle (having it being narrated by the mc) makes things tumble when stuff happens that isn't supposed to be heard or seen by them. It can be hard to ignore that, for example, Mc is the one narrating Ren's bad experience with the cashier and later still thinks they may like each other. It also makes things seem slower cause it feels like mc takes quite some time to process stuff.
I have a bit of a problem with moth's video call. It's framed to interact with moth but enforce the idea that mc does not know moth's face, yes, but having been video calling an internet friend for years and them always aiming at the ceiling is just...?? took me out a lot. It would feel less unnatural if a videocall isn't brought up at all, maybe moth is shy and never shows his face so mc and him have only calls (no video) or he has a very old cheap cam, like, I can count the pixels on screen cam, to make it easier to disguise his appearance a bit. I think other options could work better to make interactions with moth feel less... forced by plot?.
Leon seems to be presented to be the more calm and perceptive friend, but in the date his actions (not as much his words) come up quite rude, pulling at your friend's arm taking them away from their date is really out of touch (unlike telling your friend that you are a escape route, that is good perceptive friend! I liked that). It feels like everyone is portrayed quite over the top to show Ren's reactions when it doesn't need to be so, worse case maybe is Teo.
Teo... makes a couple problems I have with the writing shine. Every second of his interactions with everyone took me out by the simple idea of "why would they keep this person around?". We all can understand the idea of having a friend who is a bit crass, a bit rowdy, but Teo is just awfully mean every single time he opens his mouth. He can be a friend that is crass and sometimes steps over the line that Ren can react to. For example as his confidence crashes seeing how mc reacts positively to something he can't embody with the character he chose (I can't be kawaii boy and a vulgar crude rude dude at the same time!) he can have an outburst that, in context, can be justified by anyone cause hey, Teo was being a bit of an *hole anyway, without Teo being an awful person.
And the little end of paragraph hearts confuse me a bit cause I think it is the intonation lol.
I understand this is a demo, but Leon talking like he knew about Ren when they ran into him and Mc's date came out of nowhere and really confused me, just like if Mc's fixation is referred as a web comic, a manga or an anime and what it is called.
I mean no harm with all that, it is only my perception of stuff.
With that out. Wow I would have never thought that something as small as having the character portraits blink would make a game with this mechanic feel SO MUCH more alive, that and the small "surprised jumps" and the sort make a kind of.. static experience feel way more dynamic, it is a great touch.
Wasn't expecting so many character portraits for a demo, that is so cool, so much work!
Love that Ren trows a bunch of things at the wall to see what sticks, trying to mold himself to Mc, dressing like her favorite character and so on. I really appreciate that a bit of his tattoos can be seen (under his clothes and covered by make up) just as the remnants of snake bites, and the hoodie that implies he had a waay different style (maybe the kind that would wear all dark and chains and know to pick a lock?).
All in all... I want to see what this evolves into, maybe I end up not being the target audience, but I can see this has a ton of love and wish it the best.
I’m glad I’m not the only one who noticed the dissonance in the narrative caused by writing in 1st person p.o.v.
I understand that scenes like for example the one with Olivia are needed so players 1) don’t get a “wrong impression” of Ren (aka assuming him flirting with someone else while being on a date with Angel), and 2) to drive home that Ren is Not A Good Guy behind his shy guy facade he puts on in front of Angel. But,, it really just doesn’t make sense narrative-wise, and once you notice it, it becomes hard to ignore.
Using 1st person p.o.v. also doesn’t work well when introducing new characters, because no one walks around and starts to introduce friends and co-workers (in their own mind, to themselves) each and every time they show up somewhere. And like, the introductions seem to take place in real time because Angel completely spaces out during those time, prompting the newly introduced character to ask if they were listening.
This issue could be fixed by switching to 3rd person p.o.v., but that would require a complete rewrite of all scenes…
That aside, I completely agree with you that this is game has soo many nice mechanics and gimmicks, especially considering it’s a 1-person-project!
On another note, I think the
Leon talking like he knew about Ren when they ran into him and Mc's date came out of nowhere and really confused me
issue is actually a bug. Leon is only supposed to recognized Ren on the 2nd Day if Angel brought him home on Day 1!
I didn't really notice the pov difference or care all that much about it to be honest, at the end of the day its a fantasy otome game so nothing is meant to be realistic. yeah, no one introduces their friends in their head like that, but nobody has the ability to glitch the text or have infinite time to make choices either. And I hope no one in real life is falling for real life murderers! But just like how movies have cliche first person "flashback" scenes or how novels have those long winded "character introductory" scenes, it's all there for the viewer's benefit and that's how I interpreted those scenes.
I'm probably going to get downvoted for this, but I personally I prefer the first person pov and don't think it should be changed. It makes it easier for me to insert myself into the MC's shoes and grow attached to the characters organically. Second and third person makes it feel like I'm reading about a predefined character in a novel rather than playing a character in an otome game, and doesn't feel as immersive or gives me that sense of attachment. Rather than feeling like I'm experiencing things as the MC, it's more like the narrator is forcing me to sympathize with them while I watch from the sidelines. If I had to make a suggestion, it'd be to take the scenes [such as the Olivia scene] and alter it in a way that works. Maybe MC only gets half of the conversation and the rest is waffled noise, or maybe make the text feature smaller font size like when Ren mumbles to signify that we're not supposed to be listening.
I'm in the other field for a few of the other comments OP [not the person I'm replying to] pointed out. Moth's video call seems realistic to me since I've been in similar situations where I've felt sweaty and gross from work and didn't want to show my whole face. The hearts at the end of the text I think suits the game's aesthetic, and is what I'd consider normal for an otome game to have a CTC indicator. Teo, to me, was perceived to be a character that's meant to be disliked by the community, and from what I've seen on the creator's socials, they intend for him to come across like an asshat as well. The scene involving Leon was already confirmed to be an overlooked error and has been fixed for the next update.
Everything else in OP's comment I agree on though! I loved the blinking and jumping animations just as much as I loved the immersive sound effects and sprite changes depending on the choices I made. Certain characters would react to the outfits I picked and Ren would make different comments after I replayed the game and got his bad ending the second time. Little details like these makes me appreciate the demo so much more, and I can only imagine how much time and effort goes into creating something like this. And the fact that it's one singular person giving this to us for free is mindblowing. I doubt the creator will see this, but just in case... Keep up the great work and take everything I've said with a grain of salt! This is amazing for just a demo and I cannot wait to see what happens in future updates. Also those 18+ scenes had me in a grip! Your writing style and syntax is on a whole other level I swear
It is up to one's taste, I do think it would work better in another POV but your suggestions of reworking some scenes would really make a difference (only hearing half of the conversation and other touches) and would help the game flow a lot better.
A sweet spot can be found between yanderecon's thoughts with the introduction of character and yours: make it so it doesn't take in-universe time. An idea can go through your mind in a second so the "thinking" of the character introductions can be done without Mc having had to space out for a while to get the idea to us.
Personally I think that's where 3rd pov would make it a lot easier to write those moments, cause getting that information out in 1st pov AND make it sound naturally takes a lot more effort.
I've been in similar situations where I've felt sweaty and gross from work and didn't want to show my whole face.
Yeah, don't we all sometimes feel like that, the thing if for years you just show the ceiling... it's just weird. Weirdness and dissonance can easily take readers out of the moment. I can hold my disbelief for so many things while reading a story, I love feeling in a story, but stuffs than don't correlate properly makes it feel like there wasn't a beta-read. I don't mean this a diss at the creator, I do think cutesai is doing something really cool and you have to be quite brave to put your work out for the world to see. I mean this as honest well intended critic.
Yes, I also believe the hearts as ctc are in part with the aesthetic, it just confuses me sometimes, easily a me-problem.
Cool that the Leon scene was identified and was just a bug.
Yeah I get that Teo is meant to be disliked, he is extremely dislikable, but in a way that is my point. As presented right now I can't see the thought process of the characters that make them keep the dude around and that takes me out.
Everything else in OP's comment I agree on though!
Got me a little chuckle that you only refer to my positive intake there jajaja. But yes, there are a lot of good things in this demo, the work can be seen. I'm curious to see how it evolves, I want to see to rest of this story. Cheers!
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Can't wait for the full game ><
Thank you for being so patient!! ♡
actually sad that we can't top ren :(
aaaaa the 18+ scenes don't play any major part in the overall storyline, and as such, they aren't my highest priority right now. So I don't think I'll be adding any varying scenes with Ren until later down the line >.< Sorry!!
I have, however, written a few fics with sub/bottoming Ren on Tumblr if you're interested in checking them out!! ^^
OMG HOW DID U EVEN GO TO THAT ENDING I THOUGHT THE GAME FEATURED THE 18+ SCENES WAYYYYYYY LATER ON. I just got the good ending :)
Invite Ren over in Day 1 / Go to Ren's apartment in Day 2!!
PLEASE I AM CRAVING FOR DAY 3 PLEASE MAKE IT I'M BEGGING YOU I'M GOING INSANE
I'm very sorry for making you wait so long, but just like everyone else: I have my own real-life priorities that I need to attend to first ^^; 14DWY is just a silly lil passion project for me, and I work on it whenever I feel like it. So please don't beg creators for updates ;v;
Please made an Android version one😔💪
I'm sorry, but due to the app store guidelines and the 18+ nature of the game, there unfortunately won't be any mobile versions of "14 Days With You" for the foreseeable future.
help im new to this how do i play this game? i downloaded it already but i cant playy itt i even tried extracting it but i dont know what to do next!! TT pls help- i dont even know what application to click after i extracted it since i dont know what it looks like
go to the extracted folder and there will be 3 folders with game assets and 3 files: executable(the game), python file(game code) and sh file(also code). you need to chose the executable/application file like the one with the ren py(the vn engine) mascot girl. if you don't have the exe file maybe your antivirus thought it was sus and ate it, that happens sometimes... go check the sandbox/quarantine section maybe it's in there or try downloading and extracting the game again
whoa, this is SO GOOD. visuals are very pleasant, dialogue is really captivating, Ren is creepy in that perfect yandere way - love it!! can't wait to see how the full story's going to turn out UwU best of luck to you with the development, and thank you for such a wonderful experience!
Wahhhh thank you so much for the kind words!! I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed playing the demo ^^
would really love to play this game on a phone
I'm sorry, but due to the app store guidelines and the 18+ nature of the game, there unfortunately won't be any mobile versions of "14 Days With You" for the foreseeable future.
i love this game so much im literally gonna cry if the creator suddenly went on hiatus one da
yeah i'm sad that they haven't posted on social media, the only thing i see is their tumblr and they responded to questions 2 weeks ago but i get scareddd
Wahhhh I'm the only person who's working on the game and managing all of the social media accounts, so it can get a bit overwhelming for me sometimes ^^;
sorry, i didn't mean to say that in a bad way ! Take your time ofc and i didn't intend to make it sound like you should constantly be posting, i hope you're doing well and taking care of yourself !
Is it just me or can y'all not find the game itself in the files ;-; like no matter how many times I skim through all of the files and file folders I can't find the actual game.
I think I'm stupid, I need to extract the files.
you need to extract it.
hu hu hu can you guys recommend game like this i love it.
I really liked the whole plot around the MC, and the cutest thing is the face the character makes, which is really like someone with a double personality, I laughed a lot, including the part where he says he's going to push the girl up the stairs low loooooooooll.
PLEASE UPDATE THIS IM CRYING ITS BEEN 4 MONTHSSS 4 MONTHSSSSS
Well 12 weeks ago, it was told that day 3 was 30% completed so hopefully it'll come out soonn
12 weeks ago. 12..... TT
We gotta have hope for pookie Ren </3
I've mentioned it in the Discord a few weeks ago, but development is now 80% completed!
hoorayy :3 i don't mind waiting though, i usually just replay it to see Ren and Teo's beautiful faces lmao
okay i will trust u cutiesai
aaaa please don't comment these kinds of things here... It actually demotivates me more >.< I have a life outside of working on 14DWY, and having people constantly spam/guilt trip me for updates makes it seem like I'm nothing more than a robot ;v;
I know you mean well, and I'm very sorry for making you wait so long, but I'll continue to work on 14dWY and release content whenever I want to ^^;
Not me checking for day 3 update everyday--
I love this so much I need more Rendacted *sobs*
I replay this game like three times everyday... Ren is so 😩
i love this!! i can't wait till more updates are released this was so much fun!!
Ok my last time complaining about it not working but T_T I finally tried getting the game again on a entirely separate laptop because that other one wouldn’t work, and I extracted it and everything but just when I get to the end of day 1 I just go back to the main menu. (Tryna make this short cuz I don’t wanna bother anyone 🙏 ) the file was 2.0 but when I clicked it it was 1.0. I’m likely doing something wrong again 😤
it could just be me / the download link / my laptop or Ren just hates me. anyways ill stop complaining now and just be patient and wait for an update 😞 sorry guys!
I'm so sorry for the late response!! I don't usually check itch T_T
I'm not sure if you've already solved your problem, but just in case: make sure you've deleted any older versions of the game!! There should be a "Ren'Py" folder somewhere in your documents/applications folder; and inside it should be a "14 Days With You" folder as well. Just delete (or move) the entire folder and see if that works! If not, you might've downloaded the wrong file ^^;
I have the same thing happen to me, but it was just the name of the file. It usually still has the update even if it's called 1.0. Have you tried to open it and it only had Day 1? Because if not, I think you should try and see if it does have the update.
love this sm!! im looking forward to the rest of the days:D
ahhhh, im so excited for day 3..
10/10 ✨
Nah bro, im in love with this game, I can't wait for the third day to come out. Keep going with this masterpiece!! 🗣🔥 (I don't talk english btw so im afraid that the things that i say might be not understandable for the people that talk english idk)
Your English is perfect. I wish I could speak different languages.
Haha!! Thank you very much, If you really put the necessary effort you can learn any language you want!! <33
Ahhhh dios adoro el juego, pienso comprarlo ya cuando salga el dia 3, espero también saquen en español que igual somos una comunidad grande, solo digo jeje
Literally had a dream about this game and had to check if there was a day 3 update. Can't wait! Fingers crossed! It can't be here soon enough! :)
I'm soooo looking forward to more updates! It's a very good game and Ren is a character that captivates me and makes me curious to know more about him
and all his spicy scenes lololololll. I also want to know what happened to Violet and Elanor, I feel like something isn't right.I wonder if there's some way to make Ren feel more confident about himself and not feel threatened by anyone who comes near the MC... it's the first game I've played with this theme, so that's something I want to try, if possible.
Thanks for the great game! Keep up the good work! <3
I cant be the only one struggling to get the day 1 woohoo scene... :(
u mean the adult scene??? js get him on the bed bro ez
Please please please make android version 💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘💘
You can use JoiPlay for this. Download the program, the plugin for ren'py and simply add the same file as on this site.(I found this out almost by accident when I decided to try using the Doki-Doki game file)
I have played this game on my pc and loved it! It’s honestly an amazing game! But I wonder creator- do you think you can make it downloadable on mobile? Like android and iOS?
I'm sorry, but due to the app store guidelines and the 18+ nature of the game, there unfortunately won't be any mobile versions of "14 Days With You" for the foreseeable future.
I NEED THE NEXT DAY OR FULL GAME I FEEL LIKE IM DYINGGG i love this game so so much i have such an emotional connection to ren and i dont normally get attached to demo characters but im in love with this and the storyline is amazing too i am curious as to what is under his shirt that he is so desperate about us not seeing but im willing to wait to find that out but this game is amazing i adore ren so much hes so cute i just cantt
was looking through the yandere tag on ao3 and found a fic about ren-- this was so much better than i could've even imagined, and that's after the pretty characters, dope customizations, and your humor on this page! <3 i love all the little things (we zoomin' bois made me lol, attack on giant--) and geeeze the writing is so kick ass dude!! i'm an absolute fan and i caaaan't (but obvs will) wait to see what the other 12 days holds!! bad ends ftw but yeeyee that woohoo tho ;w; again, v well written hehehe. keep up the good work :')<3
Yooo what was the fic called, if ya don't mind me askin'? :3
My friend showed me this game and I'm in love
please make a patreon
HAAAAAAAAAAAaaaaaaaaaaaaaa I love the game, please translate it into Spanish, it doesn't matter if it's with Google translate, I need it!!! (/T//u//T)/
i need it in spanish too <3 i love Ren
when will day 3 come out?
I love this man. Please, I'm begging you to complete it. Ahhhh, Ren, my Love! I NEED YOU! ^//^
But seriously, this is a really amazing game and I'm so excited to play more of it in the future! <3
best nsfw yandere game i've ever played fr
very gud ❤
The world needs more yandere games like these!!
day 2 make me like more about the game
I have MANY thoughts on this, but they are all my personal opinion.
I see a game with so much potential, it clearly has a lot of love in it.
I think the 1st person angle (having it being narrated by the mc) makes things tumble when stuff happens that isn't supposed to be heard or seen by them. It can be hard to ignore that, for example, Mc is the one narrating Ren's bad experience with the cashier and later still thinks they may like each other. It also makes things seem slower cause it feels like mc takes quite some time to process stuff.
I have a bit of a problem with moth's video call. It's framed to interact with moth but enforce the idea that mc does not know moth's face, yes, but having been video calling an internet friend for years and them always aiming at the ceiling is just...?? took me out a lot. It would feel less unnatural if a videocall isn't brought up at all, maybe moth is shy and never shows his face so mc and him have only calls (no video) or he has a very old cheap cam, like, I can count the pixels on screen cam, to make it easier to disguise his appearance a bit. I think other options could work better to make interactions with moth feel less... forced by plot?.
Leon seems to be presented to be the more calm and perceptive friend, but in the date his actions (not as much his words) come up quite rude, pulling at your friend's arm taking them away from their date is really out of touch (unlike telling your friend that you are a escape route, that is good perceptive friend! I liked that). It feels like everyone is portrayed quite over the top to show Ren's reactions when it doesn't need to be so, worse case maybe is Teo.
Teo... makes a couple problems I have with the writing shine. Every second of his interactions with everyone took me out by the simple idea of "why would they keep this person around?". We all can understand the idea of having a friend who is a bit crass, a bit rowdy, but Teo is just awfully mean every single time he opens his mouth. He can be a friend that is crass and sometimes steps over the line that Ren can react to. For example as his confidence crashes seeing how mc reacts positively to something he can't embody with the character he chose (I can't be kawaii boy and a vulgar crude rude dude at the same time!) he can have an outburst that, in context, can be justified by anyone cause hey, Teo was being a bit of an *hole anyway, without Teo being an awful person.
And the little end of paragraph hearts confuse me a bit cause I think it is the intonation lol.
I understand this is a demo, but Leon talking like he knew about Ren when they ran into him and Mc's date came out of nowhere and really confused me, just like if Mc's fixation is referred as a web comic, a manga or an anime and what it is called.
I mean no harm with all that, it is only my perception of stuff.
With that out. Wow I would have never thought that something as small as having the character portraits blink would make a game with this mechanic feel SO MUCH more alive, that and the small "surprised jumps" and the sort make a kind of.. static experience feel way more dynamic, it is a great touch.
Wasn't expecting so many character portraits for a demo, that is so cool, so much work!
Love that Ren trows a bunch of things at the wall to see what sticks, trying to mold himself to Mc, dressing like her favorite character and so on. I really appreciate that a bit of his tattoos can be seen (under his clothes and covered by make up) just as the remnants of snake bites, and the hoodie that implies he had a waay different style (maybe the kind that would wear all dark and chains
and know to pick a lock?).All in all... I want to see what this evolves into, maybe I end up not being the target audience, but I can see this has a ton of love and wish it the best.
I’m glad I’m not the only one who noticed the dissonance in the narrative caused by writing in 1st person p.o.v.
I understand that scenes like for example the one with Olivia are needed so players 1) don’t get a “wrong impression” of Ren (aka assuming him flirting with someone else while being on a date with Angel), and 2) to drive home that Ren is Not A Good Guy behind his shy guy facade he puts on in front of Angel. But,, it really just doesn’t make sense narrative-wise, and once you notice it, it becomes hard to ignore.
Using 1st person p.o.v. also doesn’t work well when introducing new characters, because no one walks around and starts to introduce friends and co-workers (in their own mind, to themselves) each and every time they show up somewhere. And like, the introductions seem to take place in real time because Angel completely spaces out during those time, prompting the newly introduced character to ask if they were listening.
This issue could be fixed by switching to 3rd person p.o.v., but that would require a complete rewrite of all scenes…
That aside, I completely agree with you that this is game has soo many nice mechanics and gimmicks, especially considering it’s a 1-person-project!
On another note, I think the
issue is actually a bug. Leon is only supposed to recognized Ren on the 2nd Day if Angel brought him home on Day 1!
I didn't really notice the pov difference or care all that much about it to be honest, at the end of the day its a fantasy otome game so nothing is meant to be realistic. yeah, no one introduces their friends in their head like that, but nobody has the ability to glitch the text or have infinite time to make choices either.
And I hope no one in real life is falling for real life murderers!But just like how movies have cliche first person "flashback" scenes or how novels have those long winded "character introductory" scenes, it's all there for the viewer's benefit and that's how I interpreted those scenes.I'm probably going to get downvoted for this, but I personally I prefer the first person pov and don't think it should be changed. It makes it easier for me to insert myself into the MC's shoes and grow attached to the characters organically. Second and third person makes it feel like I'm reading about a predefined character in a novel rather than playing a character in an otome game, and doesn't feel as immersive or gives me that sense of attachment. Rather than feeling like I'm experiencing things as the MC, it's more like the narrator is forcing me to sympathize with them while I watch from the sidelines. If I had to make a suggestion, it'd be to take the scenes [such as the Olivia scene] and alter it in a way that works. Maybe MC only gets half of the conversation and the rest is waffled noise, or maybe make the text feature smaller font size like when Ren mumbles to signify that we're not supposed to be listening.
I'm in the other field for a few of the other comments OP [not the person I'm replying to] pointed out. Moth's video call seems realistic to me since I've been in similar situations where I've felt sweaty and gross from work and didn't want to show my whole face. The hearts at the end of the text I think suits the game's aesthetic, and is what I'd consider normal for an otome game to have a CTC indicator. Teo, to me, was perceived to be a character that's meant to be disliked by the community, and from what I've seen on the creator's socials, they intend for him to come across like an asshat as well. The scene involving Leon was already confirmed to be an overlooked error and has been fixed for the next update.
Everything else in OP's comment I agree on though! I loved the blinking and jumping animations just as much as I loved the immersive sound effects and sprite changes depending on the choices I made. Certain characters would react to the outfits I picked and Ren would make different comments after I replayed the game and got his bad ending the second time. Little details like these makes me appreciate the demo so much more, and I can only imagine how much time and effort goes into creating something like this. And the fact that it's one singular person giving this to us for free is mindblowing. I doubt the creator will see this, but just in case... Keep up the great work and take everything I've said with a grain of salt! This is amazing for just a demo and I cannot wait to see what happens in future updates.
Also those 18+ scenes had me in a grip! Your writing style and syntax is on a whole other level I swearIt is up to one's taste, I do think it would work better in another POV but your suggestions of reworking some scenes would really make a difference (only hearing half of the conversation and other touches) and would help the game flow a lot better.
A sweet spot can be found between yanderecon's thoughts with the introduction of character and yours: make it so it doesn't take in-universe time. An idea can go through your mind in a second so the "thinking" of the character introductions can be done without Mc having had to space out for a while to get the idea to us.
Personally I think that's where 3rd pov would make it a lot easier to write those moments, cause getting that information out in 1st pov AND make it sound naturally takes a lot more effort.
Yeah, don't we all sometimes feel like that, the thing if for years you just show the ceiling... it's just weird. Weirdness and dissonance can easily take readers out of the moment. I can hold my disbelief for so many things while reading a story, I love feeling in a story, but stuffs than don't correlate properly makes it feel like there wasn't a beta-read. I don't mean this a diss at the creator, I do think cutesai is doing something really cool and you have to be quite brave to put your work out for the world to see. I mean this as honest well intended critic.
Yes, I also believe the hearts as ctc are in part with the aesthetic, it just confuses me sometimes, easily a me-problem.
Cool that the Leon scene was identified and was just a bug.
Yeah I get that Teo is meant to be disliked, he is extremely dislikable, but in a way that is my point. As presented right now I can't see the thought process of the characters that make them keep the dude around and that takes me out.
Got me a little chuckle that you only refer to my positive intake there jajaja. But yes, there are a lot of good things in this demo, the work can be seen. I'm curious to see how it evolves, I want to see to rest of this story. Cheers!
I'm so excited for more and the full 14 days, the plot is so good I've GOT TO STAY UPDATED this game was so much fun to play!
I LOVE REN
I absolutely loved it, the plot as well as the characters are just awesome.